一篇Essay拿下五所常青藤的offer?

常青藤(Ivy League)一词一定不陌生吧!一直以来能进入常青藤的学生都是神话般的存在。小编曾经只知道在中国是这样,后来才知道,在美国能进入常青藤也非易事。

常青藤可能每个人都听说过,都知道成员是美国最牛的大学,但是真的能把藤校数齐的却没几个……

哈佛大学(Harvard)成立于1636年
耶鲁大学(Yale)成立于1701年
宾西法尼亚大学(University of Pennsylvania)成立于1740年
普林斯顿大学(Princeton)成立于1746年
哥伦比亚大学(Columbia)成立于1754年
布朗大学(Brown)成立于1764年
达特茅斯大学(Dartmouth)成立于1769年
康奈尔大学(Cornell)成立于1865年

嗯。。。这些名字我就看看而已🌚

但是,去年一名美国的高中生Brittany Stinson被五所常青藤名校录取!

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没错,这是一个别人家孩子的故事。

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这五所大学分别是:耶鲁大学,哥伦比亚大学,宾夕法尼亚大学,达特茅斯学院,康奈尔大学。另外,她同时还被斯坦福大学录取了,而去年斯坦福的录取率只有4.69%。

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被录取的原因?

我问天,问大地,这是为什么呢?

在她的申请材料中,比较出彩的是她的文书。众所周知,在申请美国大学的时候除了必须的SAT等成绩外,招生官最看重的莫过于文书(Essay)了。

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每个学校对Essay的要求不同,有的要求写人生中的经历,或者个人爱好,或者阐述一下为什么选择这个专业。

而她的文书写的是什么?

究竟是什么样的文书打动了那么多招生官?

写的是实习?获奖?还是成功发明?

NO! NO! NO!

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都不是!

她的文书写的是美国的Costco!!

Costco是什么?Costco是美国最大的连锁会员制仓储量贩店,简单的说就是大型批发式超市。成立以来即致力于以可能的最低价格提供给会员高品质的品牌商品。

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在Costco什么东西都是大批量,超大份,像是在大仓库里选购。小编每次去都是吃吃吃,买买买,谁会想到要把逛超市的经历写在文书里? 就是这种不走寻常路的风格, 使Brittany的文书脱颖而出。

来来来,我们一起膜拜一下她的文书

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Brittany的文书题目是:

Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.

“有很多学生有背景,身份,兴趣,或天赋,如果你觉得这些对于你的申请非常有意义,是你申请不可或缺的一部分,那请你将你的故事分享给我们。”

她的文书正文

(小伙伴想看英文版?没问题!小编放在文章末尾啦)

“如果你在某个周六早上看到Costco里有个精力充沛的两岁小女孩,那可能就是我。

我妈妈不太愿意带我去Costco,因为一进超市门,我就莫名兴奋。我的四肢都不听使唤了,我就像发现新大陆一般狂喜。

我在超市的过道上冲刺短跑,看着身旁堆叠成山的货品。我对它们充满了好奇,我想用触觉,味觉体验身边的一切。我想把头伸到冰箱里,我想钻进每一个缝隙。我像个征服者一般,但我的目标不是寻找那黄金国,而是超市各个角落的免费试用品。虽然最后都是被妈妈抓进怀里,但那时的Costco对于我来说就是神圣一般的存在。

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从包罗万象的商品到随手可得的热狗套餐, Costco可以算是消费主义的完美体现。从我还是一个只能坐在购物车里眨眼的小女孩,到如今可以独立自由穿梭在货架之间,这座超市是我童年中不可或缺的一块拼图。

作为一个资深Costco购物者,我可以做到快速定位商品,并且分辨不同种类商品的摆放区,再选择一辆容量巨大的购物车,省时又省力。

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但更多时候, 我喜欢观察周遭的顾客,看他们推着自己的购物车,装满各种墨西哥卷饼,芝士,几桶冰淇淋,还有减肥药!有时我很好奇,到底什么样的人会买三磅酸奶油呢?

是因为自己发酵的酸奶口感更好? 也许吧~

在无数个类似场景下,Costco打开了我好奇心的闸门。

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当我吃着超市里卖的热狗时,我脑海里出现的不是Costco促销热狗的广告语,而是思考有限性和无限性,酸奶油的其他创新用法,或是商品从八尺货架上掉下来会做怎样的抛物运动。

从观察每一个购物者的惯性运动,我学到的是最真实的物理知识。

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有一次我从超市买了胡桃木熏制的瘦火腿,父亲和我发生了争执,因为这是我们从来没尝试过的新口味。毫无疑问胡桃木的品质是很好的,但父亲不太愿意接受改变,他宁愿选择以前常吃的老火腿,就像他的价值观,世界观一样,认定了某件事就不愿再改变,很偏执,甚至强迫我们按照他的意愿行事。然而最后的结果却是,我俩一致觉得新口味更好吃,肉质更嫩。

在Costco获得了这些技能后,我一点点拓展到了学术领域。了解历史和生物,学习舞蹈,就像我脑海中有一辆容量无限的购物车一样,轻车熟路地收揽所有或严肃或有趣的学术知识。我学习微积分,参加越野跑,报名科研项目,因为脑海中有这样一辆购物车,我就好像有了铠甲,Costco也不仅限于Costco,它的意义早已延伸到全世界。

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不管是尝试空中瑜伽,还是在数百人面前跳舞,或是学习天文图表辐射软件,任何有趣的活动我都会积极参加。

我强烈的求知欲,超出常理的思考, 一点一滴地成就了现在的自己。多数人觉得Costco只是一个超市,但就是这个普通的超市随时满足我的好奇心,激发我探索世界的冲动。

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也正是因为这个超市的存在,让我不局限于接受现有观点,相反地,使我更关注解决问题的原因与过程,不断发现,不断求知!”

录取的背后

看完Brittany的文书后,小编想问,你确定这不是一篇Costco的广告软文?

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但是不得不说,这篇文章虽然写的是Costco, 但字里行间已经突出了Brittany的学习能力,钻研能力和用于发现新鲜事物等优良品质。有一位招生官的评价是“感觉文章写的很有趣,总是牵引着读者一直读下去”,当招生官一天浏览上百上千份的申请资料的情况下,Brittany的文书犹如一股清流,得到了五家常青藤的青睐也是情理之中。

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除了这篇Essay外,她还有什么有利条件呢?

高中四年GPA 4.0!!!
高中四年GPA 4.0!!!
高中四年GPA 4.0!!!
重要的事情说三遍

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这一项除了强大的GPA背景,就已经打败了无数申请者,另外,不得要说的是,在招生官在看申请者的文书之前,一些硬性条件是需要满足的!例如:学校的排名,GPA,SAT等。

小编查了查斯坦福大学的官方统计资料,

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在申请斯坦福大学的本科时,中学课程难度,班级排名,GPA,SAT,文书和推荐信都很重要。

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而在2016年的录取统计中,有93.19%的本科申请者的成绩是在3.75以上,而录取者的平均成绩为3.94。

但是,每个学校的要求不一样,以下数据是对美国400多家大学调查的统计结果,结果显示申请本科的过程中,GPA还是非常重要的。

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在Brittany Stinson被录取后,网络上充满了对她文书的报道,似乎她只是因为这一篇文书就得到了offer,有的人对她赞赏有加,也有的人对她嗤之以鼻,入学后还会有人说:“看,她就是Costco girl!”

但是,Brittany被录取绝非偶然,GPA4.0和SAT的背后是她的努力,而各种活动的参与背后是她的积极。单凭一篇文书是不可能得到斯坦福的offer,更多的是她的综合实力,

所以。。。。不多说了,小编去背单词了。

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Brittany Stinson 文书原文

Managing to break free from my mother’s grasp, I charged. With arms flailing and chubby legs fluttering beneath me, I was the ferocious two­ year old rampaging through Costco on a Saturday morning. My mother’s eyes widened in horror as I jettisoned my churro; the cinnamon­sugar rocket gracefully sliced its way through the air while I continued my spree. I sprinted through the aisles, looking up in awe at the massive bulk products that towered over me. Overcome with wonder, I wanted to touch and taste, to stick my head into industrial­sized freezers, to explore every crevice. I was a conquistador, but rather than searching the land for El Dorado, I scoured aisles for free samples. Before inevitably being whisked away into a shopping cart, I scaled a mountain of plush toys and surveyed the expanse that lay before me: the kingdom of Costco.

Notorious for its oversized portions and dollar­fifty hot dog combo, Costco is the apex of consumerism. From the days spent being toted around in a shopping cart to when I was finally tall enough to reach lofty sample trays, Costco has endured a steady presence throughout my life. As a veteran Costco shopper, I navigate the aisles of foodstuffs, thrusting the majority of my weight upon a generously filled shopping cart whose enormity juxtaposes my small frame. Over time, I’ve developed a habit of observing fellow patrons tote their carts piled with frozen burritos, cheese puffs, tubs of ice cream, and weight­loss supplements. Perusing the aisles gave me time to ponder. Who needs three pounds of sour cream? Was cultured yogurt any more well­mannered than its uncultured counterpart? Costco gave birth to my unfettered curiosity.

While enjoying an obligatory hot dog, I did not find myself thinking about the ‘all beef’ goodness that Costco boasted. I instead considered finitudes and infinitudes, unimagined uses for tubs of sour cream, the projectile motion of said tub when launched from an eighty foot shelf or maybe when pushed from a speedy cart by a scrawny seventeen year old. I contemplated the philosophical: If there exists a thirty­three ounce jar of Nutella, do we really have free will? I experienced a harsh physics lesson while observing a shopper who had no evident familiarity of inertia’s workings. With a cart filled to overflowing, she made her way towards the sloped exit, continuing to push and push while steadily losing control until the cart escaped her and went crashing into a concrete column, 52” plasma screen TV and all. Purchasing the yuletide hickory smoked ham inevitably led to a conversation between my father and me about Andrew Jackson’s controversiality. There was no questioning Old Hickory’s dedication; he was steadfast in his beliefs and pursuits – qualities I am compelled to admire, yet his morals were crooked. We both found the ham to be more likeable–and tender.

I adopted my exploratory skills, fine tuned by Costco, towards my intellectual endeavors. Just as I sampled buffalo­chicken dip or chocolate truffles, I probed the realms of history, dance and biology, all in pursuit of the ideal cart–one overflowing with theoretical situations and notions both silly and serious. I sampled calculus, cross­country running, scientific research, all of which are now household favorites. With cart in hand, I do what scares me; I absorb the warehouse that is the world. Whether it be through attempting aerial yoga, learning how to chart blackbody radiation using astronomical software, or dancing in front of hundreds of people, I am compelled to try any activity that interests me in the slightest.

My intense desire to know, to explore beyond the bounds of rational thought; this is what defines me. Costco fuels my insatiability and cultivates curiosity within me at a cellular level. Encoded to immerse myself in the unknown, I find it difficult to complacently accept the “what”; I want to hunt for the “whys” and dissect the “hows”. In essence, I subsist on discovery.

资料来源:
http://www.businessinsider.com/brittany-stinson-explains-how-she-wrote-her-admissions-essay-2016-4
http://www.businessinsider.com/brittany-stinson-got-accepted-into-5-ivy-league-schools-and-stanford-2016-4
http://www.businessinsider.com/high-school-senior-who-got-into-5-ivy-league-schools-shares-her-admissions-essay-2016-4

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